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'''"It has been clinically demonstrated that those who begin 30 minutes of [[mindfulness]] mediation practice a day demonstrate detectable changes within their brain structure and report a number of positive effects to their overall well-being.<ref~~>Mindfulness meditation training changes brain structure in 8 weeks |~~ http://phys.org/news/2011-01-mindfulness-meditation-brain-weeks.html~~</ref>~~ This demonstrates that even short-term periods of regular meditation have a clinically significant and measurable therapeutic effect on a neurological level. It is therefore logical to suppose based upon both the reports of those who retain meditation routines for longer periods of time and the simple logic that these effects continue to increase in intensity with persistent, regular and extended practice."'''

'''"It has been clinically demonstrated that those who begin 30 minutes of [[mindfulness]] mediation practice a day demonstrate detectable changes within their brain structure and report a number of positive effects to their overall well-being. (ref:http://phys.org/news/2011-01-mindfulness-meditation-brain-weeks.html) This demonstrates that even short-term periods of regular meditation have a clinically significant and measurable therapeutic effect on a neurological level. It is therefore logical to suppose based upon both the reports of those who retain meditation routines for longer periods of time and the simple logic that these effects continue to increase in intensity with persistent, regular and extended practice."'''

*first sentence: needs a time frame. 8 weeks? i have no idea, i didnt read the study

*last sentence doesn't make sense at all

*last sentence doesn't make sense at all, needs to be rewritten

'''"Therefore, if one wishes to fully experience the changes in perception which meditation has to offer. They must maintain a persistent routine for as much and as long as reasonably possible."'''

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-'''"It has been clinically demonstrated that those who begin 30 minutes of [[mindfulness]] mediation practice a day demonstrate detectable changes within their brain structure and report a number of positive effects to their overall well-being.<ref>Mindfulness meditation training changes brain structure in 8 weeks | http://phys.org/news/2011-01-mindfulness-meditation-brain-weeks.html</ref> This demonstrates that even short-term periods of regular meditation have a clinically significant and measurable therapeutic effect on a neurological level. It is therefore logical to suppose based upon both the reports of those who retain meditation routines for longer periods of time and the simple logic that these effects continue to increase in intensity with persistent, regular and extended practice."'''
+'''"It has been clinically demonstrated that those who begin 30 minutes of [[mindfulness]] mediation practice a day demonstrate detectable changes within their brain structure and report a number of positive effects to their overall well-being. (ref:http://phys.org/news/2011-01-mindfulness-meditation-brain-weeks.html) This demonstrates that even short-term periods of regular meditation have a clinically significant and measurable therapeutic effect on a neurological level. It is therefore logical to suppose based upon both the reports of those who retain meditation routines for longer periods of time and the simple logic that these effects continue to increase in intensity with persistent, regular and extended practice."'''
 *first sentence: needs a time frame. 8 weeks? i have no idea, i didnt read the study
-*last sentence doesn't make sense at all
+*last sentence doesn't make sense at all, needs to be rewritten
+'''"Therefore, if one wishes to fully experience the changes in perception which meditation has to offer. They must maintain a persistent routine for as much and as long as reasonably possible."'''
+*incomplete sentence
+*"If" needs a "then" later on in the sentence