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*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.

==Introduction==

'''"The modern ''iteration'' of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''

'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''

*iteration: use simpler words that most English speaking readers will understand to increase readability for PW audience

*every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:

**"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.

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*the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe

*their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe

'''"A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen, however a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host."'''

*if "however" is between two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before however and a comma after it.

*A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen; however, a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host.

'''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''

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**At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.

*needs rephrasing

~~'''"At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination, however, it seems to become second-nature or automatic with time."'''~~

*when "however" is in the middle of two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before "however" and a comma after it.

*At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination; however, it seems to become second nature or automatic with time.

*second nature isn't hyphenated. to check if a word is, you consult google.

==Tactile==

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**"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."

'''"~~Complete realism has not been reported, however~~ as the ~~tulpamancers brain becomes acclimated with interacting with the tulpa physically, it will assign increasing~~ physical ~~realism and substance towards the tactile sensations~~."'''

'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''

*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb

*~~there are two independent clauses between "however" therefore you need a semicolon before "however" and~~ a ~~comma after it.~~

*passing out now, will return later

*~~tulpamancer's brain = brain of tulpamancer = possessive = apostrophe~~

*Complete realism has not been reported; however, ~~as the tulpamancer's brain becomes acclimated with interacting with the tulpa physically, it~~ will ~~assign increasing physical realism and substance towards the tactile sensations.~~

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+*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.
 ==Introduction==
-'''"The modern ''iteration'' of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''
+'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''
-*iteration: use simpler words that most English speaking readers will understand to increase readability for PW audience
 *every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:
 **"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.
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 *the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe
 *their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe
-'''"A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen, however a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host."'''
-*if "however" is between two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before however and a comma after it.
-*A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen; however, a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host.
 '''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''
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 **At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.
 *needs rephrasing
-'''"At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination, however, it seems to become second-nature or automatic with time."'''
-*when "however" is in the middle of two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before "however" and a comma after it.
-*At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination; however, it seems to become second nature or automatic with time.
-*second nature isn't hyphenated. to check if a word is, you consult google.
 ==Tactile==
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 **"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."
-'''"Complete realism has not been reported, however as the tulpamancers brain becomes acclimated with interacting with the tulpa physically, it will assign increasing physical realism and substance towards the tactile sensations."'''
+'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''
+*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb
-*there are two independent clauses between "however" therefore you need a semicolon before "however" and a comma after it.
+*passing out now, will return later
-*tulpamancer's brain = brain of tulpamancer = possessive = apostrophe
-*Complete realism has not been reported; however, as the tulpamancer's brain becomes acclimated with interacting with the tulpa physically, it will assign increasing physical realism and substance towards the tactile sensations.