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*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.

==Introduction==

'''"The modern ''iteration'' of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''

'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''

*iteration: use simpler words that most English speaking readers will understand to increase readability for PW audience

*every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:

**"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.

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*the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe

*their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe

'''"A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen, however a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host."'''

*if "however" is between two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before however and a comma after it.

*A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen; however, a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host.

'''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''

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**At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.

*needs rephrasing

~~'''"At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination, however, it seems to become second-nature or automatic with time."'''~~

*when "however" is in the middle of two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before "however" and a comma after it.

*At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination; however, it seems to become second nature or automatic with time.

*second nature isn't hyphenated. to check if a word is, you consult google.

==Tactile==

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**"...which lack substance, i.e., the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch."

**"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."

'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''

*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb

*passing out now, will return later

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+*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.
 ==Introduction==
-'''"The modern ''iteration'' of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''
+'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''
-*iteration: use simpler words that most English speaking readers will understand to increase readability for PW audience
 *every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:
 **"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.
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 *the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe
 *their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe
-'''"A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen, however a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host."'''
-*if "however" is between two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before however and a comma after it.
-*A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen; however, a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host.
 '''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''
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 **At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.
 *needs rephrasing
-'''"At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination, however, it seems to become second-nature or automatic with time."'''
-*when "however" is in the middle of two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before "however" and a comma after it.
-*At first, it may require the concentration of the host or tulpa to maintain the visible hallucination; however, it seems to become second nature or automatic with time.
-*second nature isn't hyphenated. to check if a word is, you consult google.
 ==Tactile==
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 **"...which lack substance, i.e., the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch."
 **"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."
+'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''
+*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb
+*passing out now, will return later