User:Oskykins/Tulpa grammar: Difference between revisions

(14 intermediate revisions by the same user not shown)

Line 1:

*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.

==Introduction==

'''"The modern ''iteration'' of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''

'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''

*iteration: use simpler words that most English speaking readers will understand to increase readability for PW audience

*every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:

**"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.

Line 106:

Line 107:

*the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe

*their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe

'''"A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen, however a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host."'''

*if "however" is between two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before however and a comma after it.

*A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen; however, a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host.

'''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''

Line 127:

Line 123:

**At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.

*needs rephrasing

==Tactile==

'''"While the tulpa is being imposed on the environment, this refers to the tulpaemancers ability to feel tactile sensation accompanied with touching or otherwise interacting with them."'''

*rephrase, too confusing

*tulpaemancer's ability = ability of the tulpaemancer = possessive = apostrophe

'''"For example, if the tulpaemancer is trying to be able to feel their tulpas imposed form, they could practice focusing on what their tulpas skin, or clothes, or otherwise would feel like if touched."'''

*tulpa's imposed form = tulpa's forum = form of tulpa = possessive = apostrophe

*tulpa's skin = skin of tulpa = possessive = apostrophe

*tulpa's skin, or clothes, or otherwise

**we only use "or" once in a series of lists to prevent redundancy

**tulpa's skin, clothes, or otherwise

==Tactile gradient==

'''Accurate tactile sensation lacking form density/substance''' - '''"phantom sensations" or "touched by a ghost" type experience.'''

*"phantom sensations" or "touched by a ghost" type experience.

**this is an incomplete sentence. it does not have a verb or make sense by itself

*change it to full sentence with subject + verb + elements which allow it to make sense by itself

fuck it. i'm just going to delete this shit though because it is not needed

'''"Tactile sensations such as texture, temperature, material, and weight are perceptible as diminished ''facsimiles'' drawn from memory to the actual physical tactile sensations they represent."'''

*facsimiles: use simpler words to increase readability

*i looked on google and other words that are synonymous with this word and would be more well-known to the readers of PW include: copies, replications, reproductions, and duplicates

*"copies" sounds best and is simple and effective

*"facsimiles" generally means a copy of written or printed material like books etc anyways so it's not exactly the most accurate term to use

'''"Physical contact with the tulpa will be felt as accurate tactile hallucinations which lack substance ie. the tulpas form would not feel solid to the touch."'''

*the tulpa's form = the form of the tulpa = possessive = apostrophe

*you fucked up the "i.e."

*it is "i.e." not "ie."

*you need to format it one of two ways:

**"...which lack substance, i.e., the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch."

**"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."

'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''

*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb

*passing out now, will return later

@@ Line 1: / Line 1: @@
+*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.
 ==Introduction==
-'''"The modern ''iteration'' of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''
+'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''
-*iteration: use simpler words that most English speaking readers will understand to increase readability for PW audience
 *every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:
 **"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.
@@ Line 106: / Line 107: @@
 *the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe
 *their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe
-'''"A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen, however a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host."'''
-*if "however" is between two independent clauses, you need a semicolon before however and a comma after it.
-*A young tulpa may rely more on its host to actively focus on their form to be seen; however, a more developed tulpa can impose themselves without any conscious thought or attention from the host.
 '''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''
@@ Line 127: / Line 123: @@
 **At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.
 *needs rephrasing
+==Tactile==
+'''"While the tulpa is being imposed on the environment, this refers to the tulpaemancers ability to feel tactile sensation accompanied with touching or otherwise interacting with them."'''
+*rephrase, too confusing
+*tulpaemancer's ability = ability of the tulpaemancer = possessive = apostrophe
+'''"For example, if the tulpaemancer is trying to be able to feel their tulpas imposed form, they could practice focusing on what their tulpas skin, or clothes, or otherwise would feel like if touched."'''
+*tulpa's imposed form = tulpa's forum = form of tulpa = possessive = apostrophe
+*tulpa's skin = skin of tulpa = possessive = apostrophe
+*tulpa's skin, or clothes, or otherwise
+**we only use "or" once in a series of lists to prevent redundancy
+**tulpa's skin, clothes, or otherwise
+==Tactile gradient==
+'''Accurate tactile sensation lacking form density/substance''' - '''"phantom sensations" or "touched by a ghost" type experience.'''
+*"phantom sensations" or "touched by a ghost" type experience.
+**this is an incomplete sentence. it does not have a verb or make sense by itself
+*change it to full sentence with subject + verb + elements which allow it to make sense by itself
+fuck it. i'm just going to delete this shit though because it is not needed
+'''"Tactile sensations such as texture, temperature, material, and weight are perceptible as diminished ''facsimiles'' drawn from memory to the actual physical tactile sensations they represent."'''
+*facsimiles: use simpler words to increase readability
+*i looked on google and other words that are synonymous with this word and would be more well-known to the readers of PW include: copies, replications, reproductions, and duplicates
+*"copies" sounds best and is simple and effective
+*"facsimiles" generally means a copy of written or printed material like books etc anyways so it's not exactly the most accurate term to use
+'''"Physical contact with the tulpa will be felt as accurate tactile hallucinations which lack substance ie. the tulpas form would not feel solid to the touch."'''
+*the tulpa's form = the form of the tulpa = possessive = apostrophe
+*you fucked up the "i.e."
+*it is "i.e." not "ie."
+*you need to format it one of two ways:
+**"...which lack substance, i.e., the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch."
+**"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."
+'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''
+*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb
+*passing out now, will return later