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'''"The most important aspect of a meditative practice is that of practicing [[mindfulness]]. A concept which can be broken down into two distinct subcomponents."'''
*visual section needs more info and instructions on how to visualize and eventually hallucinate tulpa.


*sentence fragment. doesnt make sense by itself.  
==Introduction==
'''"The modern iteration of the phenomenon generally approaches the concept differently, treating tulpas as permanent every-day companions, created to accompany hosts in their daily life."'''


*"The most important aspect of a meditative practice is [[mindfulness]], a concept which can be broken down into two distinct subcomponents."
*every-day: this word does not have a hyphen. it's either "everyday" or "every day" depending on specific rules:
**"everyday" is an adjective (describes a noun) used to describe things that (1) occur every day, or (2) are ordinary or commonplace.
**"every day": the adjective (describes a noun) "every" modifies the noun (person, place, thing, or idea) "day".
*For example, every day you eat breakfast. You brush your teeth every day. Maybe you go for a walk every day. These are everyday activities.
*to find out which one to use, replace everyday/every day with "each day".
**If "each day" would make sense in its place, then you want the two-word form.  
**Everyday, meanwhile, is synonymous with daily or ordinary


'''"In order overcome this and document meditation as whole, [[psychonautwiki]] is simply going to devise a simple, open source, usable technique and set of information to define a generalized meditation methodology and its different components."'''
'''"The distinguishing factor that separates a tulpa from an imaginary ''friend, is'' the way in which the host experiences no sense of agency or sense of ownership over the thoughts and actions of the tulpa."'''


*this sounds terrible.... don't do this... you shouldn't be adding the word "psychonautwiki"
*friend, is: you don't put commas where you pause in speech. this is a common misconception which makes people use excess and unneeded commas


*"In order to overcome this and document meditation as a whole, a simple and usable open source technique and a set of information have been devised to define a generalized meditation methodology and its different components."
'''"These subcultures tend to define the word ''tulpa'' as a mental construct designed to appear as an [[autonomous entity]] which with ''training, can'' consistently appear to the practitioner without the usage of [[hallucinogens]]."'''


'''"This is with the belief that it will be equal or greater in efficiency within the way its regular practice induces specific [[Meditation#Subjective effects|subjective effects]]."'''
*tulpa: this is not a grammar rule, but it is generally helpful to tell your readers that you are referring to a word rather than using its meaning by using quotation marks or italic font in order to separate it.
*training, can: again, you do not place commas where you pause in speech.
**there is a list of rules here: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/owlprint/607/
***i can help you go over this if you need


*ok you've already used the word "this" for every single sentence in this paragraph so think of something new now. and you need to make clear what "it" is.
'''"However, the exact nature of what a tulpa is, and the mechanisms on which it ''acts, remain'' subjects of speculation within the tulpa community."'''
*the first two commas are grammatically correct, but the third is not.
*acts, remain: this is another example of you adding a comma where you paused in your head which isn't grammatically correct


'''This is repeated with the intention of quietening ''ones'' mind.'''
==Designing a tulpa==
*quietening 11111111111111s
'''"At its most basic level, a tulpa is created simply by designing every aspect of it in as much detail as ''possible, this'' includes the personality, appearance and voice of the tulpa but also many other factors which one could conceive of."'''
*im pretty sure the only time you'll ever use ones without an apostrophe is if you are detailing with actual number ones.
*one's mind... always add apostrophe onto "ones"


'''The average human being ''which'' ''attemptes'' to ''quieten'' their thoughts will notice that their inner monologue will autonomously interject and distract one from the task at hand in a fashion which seems entirely uncontrollable.'''
*what you have here is an attempt at combining two independent clauses together using a comma
**it is not grammatically correct to do this with just a comma.
*an independent clause is a clause that can stand by itself as a complete sentence.
*you can combine two independent clauses by using a conjunction (and, but, for, nor, yet, or, so) or by using a semicolon
*alternatively, you can simply split up the independent clauses into two sentences using a period and capital letter


"The average human being who"
'''"It is worth noting ''however'' that once sentience has been gained, deviation from its original design is very common."'''
*use "who" for people
*however: you ALWAYS need commas between the word "however" if it isn't at the beginning or end of the sentence.
*use "which" for things
*use "that" for things and (informally) people


attempts
'''"This can be defined as the act of a tulpa altering its form in your mind, or some other ''feature, of its own'' volition, causing it to look or act differently from the host's predefined idea of the tulpa."'''
quiet


'''"During the performation of this task as an act of mediation, attention is placed upon the movement of the abdomen when breathing in and out..."'''
*feature, of its own: don't put commas where you pause in your head


'''"During the ''performation'' of this task as an act of mediation, attention is placed upon the repetition of a repeated and outwardly spoken phrase of one's own choosing."'''
'''"Whether or not deviations ''occur, depends'' entirely on the tulpamancer and tulpa in question."'''


'''"During the ''performation'' of this task as an act of mediation, [[mindfulness]] is intensively placed upon the act of upholding a task of any sort with varying levels difficulty depending on what one chooses."'''
*occur, depends: don't put commas where you pause in your head


*performation isn't even a word... wtf
==Applications for tulpas==
'''"The mental construct of a tulpa can be applied to help the host with a variety of different tasks, some applications commonly found within the tulpa community include:"'''


*it's called "performance"
*another grammatically incorrect attempt at combining two independent clauses
*split the two independent clauses into two sentences


'''"A famous exercise is the mindful tasting of a raisin, in which a raisin is being tasted and eaten mindfully."'''
==Auditory==
'''"For example, early communication is often limited to non-linguistic and/or mutually generated responses, consequently a tulpaemancer should be perceptive to these forms of communication."'''


*too redundant
*another grammatically incorrect attempt at combining two independent clauses
*split the two independent clauses into two sentences


'''https://psychonautwiki.org/w/index.php?title=Meditation&type=revision&diff=55477&oldid=55463'''
'''"Conversation carries an inherent opportunity for response, additionally the tulpa can mutually generate responses from the ideas one talks to them about."'''


*too much to put here
*another grammatically incorrect attempt at combining two independent clauses
*split the two independent clauses into two sentences


'''"It has been clinically demonstrated that those who begin 30 minutes of [[mindfulness]] mediation practice a day demonstrate detectable changes within their brain structure and report a number of positive effects to their overall well-being. (ref:http://phys.org/news/2011-01-mindfulness-meditation-brain-weeks.html) This demonstrates that even short-term periods of regular meditation have a clinically significant and measurable therapeutic effect on a neurological level. It is therefore logical to suppose based upon both the reports of those who retain meditation routines for longer periods of time and the simple logic that these effects continue to increase in intensity with persistent, regular and extended practice."'''
'''"This conversational engagement can be on any topic, the events of the day, abstract ideas and beliefs, reading aloud, story telling, and so forth."'''


*first sentence: needs a time frame. 8 weeks? i have no idea, i didnt read the study
*you have phrased the sentence grammatically like this:
*last sentence doesn't make sense at all, needs to be rewritten
**This conversational engagement can be on any topic
**This conversational engagement can be on the events of the day
**This conversational engagement can be on abstract ideas and beliefs
**This conversational engagement can be on reading aloud
**This conversational engagement can be on story telling


'''"Therefore, if one wishes to fully experience the changes in perception which meditation has to offer. They must maintain a persistent routine for as much and as long as reasonably possible."'''
*do the last two sentences make sense to you? not as clearly as it should.
*to fix, i have replaced "be on" with "involve"


*incomplete sentence
'''"There are several conditions and practices which can facilitate ''communication that are useful'' while initially developing this ability."'''
*If it begins with "if" then it needs a "then" later on in the sentence


'''"https://psychonautwiki.org/w/index.php?title=Meditation&diff=prev&oldid=55481"'''
*"communication" = singular
**therefore, use "is"
**communication that IS useful


'''"These range from sitting, standing to walking."'''
'''"A quiet environment free from distractions is ideal, one should stay receptive to their tulpa but avoid over-expectation which can hinder the young ''tulpas ability'' to communicate."'''
*"sitting, standing"
 
*you can't use a comma when it's just two things. you have to use a conjunction like "and" or "or"
*another grammatically incorrect attempt at combining two independent clauses
*would be "sitting and standing to walking"
*split the two independent clauses into two sentences
*orrrrr "sitting, standing or walking"
*tulpa's ability: the ability belongs to the tulpa = it is possessive = use an apostrophe
 
'''"At first, a tulpas thought stream or mind voice will usually sound very similar or identical to their hosts thought stream."'''
*tulpa's thought stream = the thought stream belongs to the tulpas =  possesive = use apostrophe
*their host's thought stream = the thought stream of their host = possessive = use apostrophe
 
'''"With time and development, ''the tulpas communication'' becomes more prominent as an internal response, more defined as their own unique voice, more capable of extended discussion, and more capable of conveying abstract or complicated ideas."'''
*the tulpa's communication = the communication of the tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe
*can rephrase rest of sentence so it's not redundant as fuck
**With time and development, the tulpa's communication becomes more prominent as an internal response, more defined as their own unique voice, and more capable of extended discussion as well as abstract or complicated ideas.
 
'''"Separately generated internal responses which sound as if they are simply another thought stream present ''along side'' of ''ones own'' can be achieved relatively quickly compared to audible responses which sound as if they are externally generated for most tulpaemancers."'''
 
*alongside is ALWAYS one word
*one's own unique voice = one's voice = the voice of one = possessive = need apostrophe
 
==Visual==
'''"Visualization is the aspect of tulpaemancy with refers to the hosts ability to see their tulpas visual form and their inner mindscape/wonderland."'''
 
*the host's ability = the ability of the host = possessive = use apostrophe
*their tulpa's visual form = tulpa's form = form of tulpa = possessive = use apostrophe
 
'''"At the early stages, it may be hard for one to visualize a stable form mentally, it may lack detail or flicker and fragment."'''
*two independent sentences combined with a comma is not allowed in the English language
*split them up using "and" or period and capital letters
 
'''"The lower level of external visual imposition, that initial stage, is the transitory period before their visible form starts resembling their internal form."'''
 
*needs rephrasing, too confusing
 
'''"At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as a darkened shade imposed on your vision, a localized visual distortion, or translucent and blurry."'''
 
here's how it reads grammatically:
**At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as a darkened shade imposed on your vision
**At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as a localized visual distortion
**At first, a tulpa's visible form may start as simple as translucent and blurry.
*needs rephrasing
 
==Tactile==
'''"While the tulpa is being imposed on the environment, this refers to the tulpaemancers ability to feel tactile sensation accompanied with touching or otherwise interacting with them."'''
 
*rephrase, too confusing
*tulpaemancer's ability = ability of the tulpaemancer = possessive = apostrophe
 
'''"For example, if the tulpaemancer is trying to be able to feel their tulpas imposed form, they could practice focusing on what their tulpas skin, or clothes, or otherwise would feel like if touched."'''
 
*tulpa's imposed form = tulpa's forum = form of tulpa = possessive = apostrophe
*tulpa's skin = skin of tulpa = possessive = apostrophe
*tulpa's skin, or clothes, or otherwise
**we only use "or" once in a series of lists to prevent redundancy
**tulpa's skin, clothes, or otherwise
 
==Tactile gradient==
'''Accurate tactile sensation lacking form density/substance''' - '''"phantom sensations" or "touched by a ghost" type experience.'''
*"phantom sensations" or "touched by a ghost" type experience.
**this is an incomplete sentence. it does not have a verb or make sense by itself
*change it to full sentence with subject + verb + elements which allow it to make sense by itself
fuck it. i'm just going to delete this shit though because it is not needed
 
'''"Tactile sensations such as texture, temperature, material, and weight are perceptible as diminished ''facsimiles'' drawn from memory to the actual physical tactile sensations they represent."'''
 
*facsimiles: use simpler words to increase readability
*i looked on google and other words that are synonymous with this word and would be more well-known to the readers of PW include: copies, replications, reproductions, and duplicates
*"copies" sounds best and is simple and effective
*"facsimiles" generally means a copy of written or printed material like books etc anyways so it's not exactly the most accurate term to use
 
'''"Physical contact with the tulpa will be felt as accurate tactile hallucinations which lack substance ie. the tulpas form would not feel solid to the touch."'''
 
*the tulpa's form = the form of the tulpa = possessive = apostrophe
*you fucked up the "i.e."
*it is "i.e." not "ie."
*you need to format it one of two ways:
**"...which lack substance, i.e., the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch."
**"...which lack substance (i.e. the tulpa's form would not feel solid to the touch)."
 
'''"Fleeting sensation as the result of certain perceived tactile stimuli''' - '''''Dissociation from physical senses.''"'''
*this is an incomplete sentence that needs a verb
*passing out now, will return later
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